Pickle810

Thanks people! Reading your comments, I realize I probably should've read it over a few more times, editing and such, instead of writing it at three in the morning and ...

I wanted to add that those old Roman/Latin names added a great mood to the piece, making the Realm it's set in fit together great! Thanks for writing such a ...

Hey, thanks! The mother was totally based on my own- no, just kidding! Thanks for the typo fix! My comp. didn't find it. About the mother, though. She's lashing out ...

Oh! Totally didn't mean to hit submit there! Lemme give you the rest of my opinion. Overall, the piece was well written, with some problems in the overall paragraph situation. ...