PhoenixBishop

I am writing a book. It will be part of a series of four. The series is called Phoenix Saga, the first book will be called The Board. It's about ...

The others basically covered everything, but I think you can be more descriptive of the Heads. Not just physically or names, but Bobby's feelinga bou them as a whole not ...

Some one asked me if this was fantasy based off the first chapter. Well here is some proof. I will finish out this character chapters which goes to three, and ...

The First one is too much dialogue try adding in more actions. The second one doesn't make sense because you don't make it clear that they made up. They just ...

"Hey Babe." said Jake as Jenna got into the car. He gave her a quick kiss and started driving down the road. "You look beautiful." said Jake, smiling at Jenna. ...

Interesting, and I like your vampire reference.

I started in the 3rd grade. Of course my first book idea was crap. It was about the world being taken over by aliens, and the government used clones to ...

This is part of a series I'm starting that I'm on the fence about. Please comment I need Input. It was two o’clock in the morning and the party had ...

It's refreshing to read this because I was starting to think I was crazy for hating the books. This was funny and yet so true.

Most of the time I hate first person stories, but your character has so much life that it's good, and I'd like to read more. I'm torn on the revelation ...

Hi I like writing on large scales. I find it impossible to write short stories because I can't think on a small scale. That is why I have mapped out ...

I think your good at keeping your reader attached. You are good at showing characters personalities through dialuge, my only critique would be is your usage of tags. Substututions for ...

Your description is amazing. That's my biggest problem I'm not always able to describe what's in my head, but you explain so you can actualy see it in your head. ...

Chapter 1 Ethan Tucker This is a small chapter from the novel I'm currently editing. Ethan watched the skater’s wheel around performing as many tricks as they could, and boys ...