PhoenixBishop

Please give me input. If you have read my stuff before. I have edited this much better Kyle sat in the front seat next to his brother who was impatiently ...

I'm back! Sorry if I offended you last time I didn't actually read your avatar name if I had I would probably have guessed you were french, and wouldn't have ...

I know what you mean I can never find anyone to read my chapters. So I'm going to be nice and read this whole thing and give the best feedback ...

This is good writing only a few comments. " Jason ..." So that was the kid's name. Jerk. "Ms. Kaylee is not an item that needs inspecting. You can face ...

NO. You should never use even a quarter of those words. Seriously ejaculated. My biggest pet peeve as a writer is needles tags. Said is an invisible word if you ...

I have five main characters and I have a special ability for all of them but one. Tonya Bishop- Talk to animals transform into animals she's previously touched Annie Small- ...

Yes this is a problem. It has come to the point where it would be wise to not put on full chapters at a time. I learned this, because no ...

I usually have no control of how my characters turn out, and I must admit some of them are quite cliched. In Order to remedy this give them a strong ...

I have deleted this thread until I've finished editing it

Your stuff is getting really good each chapter gets better and pulls me in deeper. A few suggestions I was going to miss Katie’s birthday. “ I would put this ...

I liked it, I think you should introduce your character sooner instead of all the description. The slug comparison needs to go. Otherwise I think it was really original and ...

I have four main character. One of them our a couple and I plan on killing him off in the first book. Being that this is a series I wonder ...

I just read chapter the newest manga and it was so cool. If you don't know what Naruto is. It's an anime about Ninjas. My favorite character to date would ...

I glossed over the fact that the character is basically in a love triangle with her old boyfriend and his cloned. In truth I added the political aspect at the ...

This is the premise for my next book. Girl survives a horrible car accident one in which kills all of her friends and boyfriend. After months of therapy she moves ...