PhoenixBishop

Well I think it comes into question what you mean by too good. This I've noticed is a problem with villains. Writers tend to overpower their villains to the point ...

Sidney~ Sidney stopped playing when someone approached. Maybe they wanted some pudding. He had the taste for another cup, but the other boy had been right, they needed to conserve ...

The frolicking pony is very pretentious so he always skipped around trees. When suddenly groundhogs attacked nearby settlers who were smoking some turkeys. Howling winds blasted rifles, the men graspe

As Rosey said, it needs to be as close to perfect as possible, but you can start looking for agents now. Do extensive research into the agents you wish to ...

Seth~ Seth had mastered acting nice, for the most part he never voiced his opinions. After all, ugly people did tend to get temperamental when you pointed out the fact ...

And Seth was going to be nice.....I guess that's dead now. Fine, Seth begins to plot.

. Lion King . The Hunchback of Notre Dame .Crouching Tiger Hidden Dragon . Batman Begins/Dark Knight .Toy Story 3 .Inception . Scream .Harry Potter Prisoner of Azkaban . Jurassic ...

Seth~ Bored, that was the best way Seth could describe his mood. He looked over at his brother who was scarfing down a pudding cup. He rolled his eyes, and ...

Name: Seth Baxter Age: 17 Gender: Male Appearance: Seth stands at 5'9 and has a lean toned body with nearly zero body fat, thanks to his picky eating and constant ...

Charlie went to see the little girl first. He wasn't sure if she would be capable of eating the soup, but she was probably more in need of sustenance than ...

Charlie Rose - The rich aroma of the various herbs and spices assaulted Charlie's nose, he sniffed the soup he had prepared. It smelled like perfection. He took the large ...

Name: Charlie Rose Age: 18 Gender: Male Abilities: None Appearance: A tall lanky teenager, with brown hair and big round dark eyes. He’s rather pale, and he’s bone skinny. Personality: ...

Phoenix lands for review. I really, really liked this. The interpretation of the prompt to your story is brilliant. Now for my little nitpicks on the overall. Writing. The first ...

Phoenix lands for a review Okay, I liked this a lot. Now lets dig a little deeper and see what I liked and did like. Since I read the first ...