Phoebe

I have to say, I'm not incredibly fond of the use of brackets. What was the point? Was it supposed to add emphasis? If so, why are those particular words--incredibly ...

Since you asked for assistance, let's dissect this line by line, yes? To love... As this is your title, it does not need to be repeated; that just bogs it ...

I can't say I particularly liked this, order; it has something of the feel of a hymn to me, and while the music may be moving to some, the poetry ...

I have to say, I don't hate it for the reasons I think you feared--but truly, I cannot say I like it at all. The repetition is mind-numbing, and while ...

It seems bubbles-my-dear has taken all my points, right out from under me--and before I could give them, too! Showing is always the best way to go about this, in ...

While I agree with Snoink about the two lines that are, as she mentioned, based primarily on cliche (usually, though, note, not always, something to avoid), I'll admit that I'm ...

Just so you know, you have misspelled words--"untill," "didnlt," and various times, "i." When this site has a spell-check built into it, this is unacceptable. I refuse to take you ...

Yes. Um. Reviewing your own stuff? You don't rock. That's cheating. And double-posting is bad etiquette. Sort of like putting your elbows on the cyber-table when your parents' boss is ...

Colleen kindly pointed out the typo in the title; I'll not harp on it, though it is poor show. ^~ As far as this poem goes, I would rate the ...

I like the idea of destructive love, but I agree with Cade; the use of the marionette is rather cliche at this point. Also, please remember this: punctuation is your ...

What on earth did line breaks do to you to deserve such mistreatment? Line breaks in poetry are often used to create drama, yes? A sense of either urgency or ...

I have to side with Suzanne; the overuse of ellipses has done nothing but drown this poem in what I hope is a wrongly-conveyed sense of its own superiority. Ellipses ...

Disregard the above reviews. They're far too kind. This is not poetry; it is a banal observation, one that has been made far too many times before. Please check out ...

As Simon Cowell might say: "Awful. Truly awful." Not only is the subject matter done to death, but your grasp of poetics is, as mentioned above, painfully lacking. Why did ...

Actually, I rather like the bluntness--it's layered, is it not? Because while John seems to be the compliant roommate, he too has a slip in his book with a name ...