Phoebe

Yes. Um. Reviewing your own stuff? You don't rock. That's cheating. And double-posting is bad etiquette. Sort of like putting your elbows on the cyber-table when your parents' boss is ...

You might want to find an administrator to move this to the "Lyrics" section; you've currently got it housed in "Lyrical Poetry," which is not at all the same thing. ...

Colleen kindly pointed out the typo in the title; I'll not harp on it, though it is poor show. ^~ As far as this poem goes, I would rate the ...

I like the idea of destructive love, but I agree with Cade; the use of the marionette is rather cliche at this point. Also, please remember this: punctuation is your ...

What on earth did line breaks do to you to deserve such mistreatment? Line breaks in poetry are often used to create drama, yes? A sense of either urgency or ...

I have to side with Suzanne; the overuse of ellipses has done nothing but drown this poem in what I hope is a wrongly-conveyed sense of its own superiority. Ellipses ...

Dearest YWS: I rather fail at this being mysterious bit, don’t I? Ah well. I’ve become attached to the name now, though it began as simply a little leg-stretching exercise ...

I truly commend your word choice hear, Lady Beks, though I thought the comparison to a bear might have connotations best left untouched--or, rather, more thoroughly propounded. Encore, encore!

Disregard the above reviews. They're far too kind. This is not poetry; it is a banal observation, one that has been made far too many times before. Please check out ...

This truly is a tragedy; one had to respect the woman who had the tenacity and chutzpah to rise to P.M. in a country where her sisters are oppressed.

As Simon Cowell might say: "Awful. Truly awful." Not only is the subject matter done to death, but your grasp of poetics is, as mentioned above, painfully lacking. Why did ...

I'm thinking that they are the ones in Sierra Leone; it certainly adds a new depth to everything, especially Alison's suicidal tendency. Truly a beautiful little script, dear smorg!

Ah, historical fiction! Lovely! And the Irish supply a fertile earth, yes? ^^ Best of luck, Wiggy--I look forward to seeing these. ^~

Amelia: Thank you! ^^ Your comments are invaluable. I know what you mean about the opening lines; this poem is something of an experiment, and highly conceptual, so I didn't ...

I love it! Truly delightful. I would love to see this one acted. I can't think of any criticisms at the moment, but I'm bookmarking this one for further consideration ...