PhantomInvader

All right, here is chapter two. --- Chapter Two School: So Far, So Grotesque The first day of school went by exactly as it always had since the school system ...

Thanks for the critique! Most of the unneeded stuff was for the meter/rhythm, though I admit there was probably a better way to do it. And actually yes, she did. ...

A poem I wrote for my little cousin. Goosebumps --- Haunting whispers of all kinds, A spider crawling up your spine, Cool breeze, a tight squeeze, Chills you to the ...

This is very well written, but there are just a couple of things that are bothering me. Honey, amber eyes but they quickly began to darken and harden into black ...

I think 'had' should be 'hat' How in the world did I miss that? I checked over it like, four times! XDD who pointed at the front of the class ...

Thanks for the help, all of you! I've decided to put one actual chapter up before leaving it be for a good few days. Chapter one has more character introduction ...

Just finished "She's My Winona" by Fall Out Boy. Moving on to "I Do Not Hook Up" by Kelly Clarkson.

For the story, my process goes by the following: Characters -- Appearance, personality, quirks, ambitions, backgrounds Plot -- What is going to happen Plot execution outline -- How it's going ...

M'kay~! This is really, really well done. I haven't seen something done in this (I guess I should call it a style) for a long time now. Self narrative and ...

The description of this forum drew me in: I like talking about myself. The title of the thread slightly taken from the Secret Life of Bees (which, much to my ...

I like you already. 8D likewise. “Psychological stuff”? Sounds interesting. So you hate the dentist. Do you hate going there, or do you hate the person who is the dentist? ...

"Is that any way to speak to your mother?" - Coraline

Yeah. So. I really hate the 'this story' sort of set up. 'This story will...' It's boring, unnecessary and takes the reader out of the actual story. I'd cut it. ...

Beginning Notes: This is my novel (currently unfinished, and this is the rough version) that I hope to have finished by Halloween at the latest. It's almost done now, but ...

Perhaps it's my naivete, but I can't find anything terribly wrong with this piece (well, nothing that I can point out without sounding like a broken record). So I'll tell ...