PetalPickingPoet

So I'm getting the feeling English isn't your first language. If so, WOW. I could never even consider writing in another language from the one I speak in. So great ...

Thanks guys!! As you can see, Trikky, I have taken your critique to heart and made changes accordingly. See, it's describing an actual event. I agree that the end needs ...

Note: I feel that this is too ambiguous and doesn't portray the event and desired meaning properly, but I can't figure out how to make it work. Any critique at ...

Thanks so much! I meant to add punctuation before I posted. (That's always the last thing I do to a poem.) It must have slipped my mind. Fixed now. Thanks ...

Sometimes I wonder what lies beyond those tripping eyes. As I sit here, holding your hands I feel you slipping away Faster and faster into a deep, dark abyss The ...

I was shaken by your innocence- The petals pooling around your ankles As you played roulette With a simple drooping daisy. Thorn bushes catch your dress. Blackberries catch your eyes. ...

Your mother, your father, Your sister, your brother, your aunts, your uncles, and all the others. For some reason the rhythm of this last line doesn't click for me. I ...

That sick, twisted idiot that just sits back to watch. I'm thinking I would go with " who just sits back to watch. Actually, I might change the word to ...

Umm, hi! I'm new here. The name's Alyssa. I'm fifteen. I've been writing for years, probably close to six or seven years. I write mainly poetry, mainly freeverse. I do ...