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Re: The Date
Hiya! :] Really nice read! Super cute :] Reccomendations..... -I'd say you could describe things a bit more, for example the physical things the main character feels (possibly shaky hands ...
Jul 6, 2010 -
Re: Dollhouse [Ch. 1]
Hello hello! Well I really like this :) I love the way you described the room; the deep crimson silk curtains. Lovely :) One suggestion I have... In this part... ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: J.D. doesn't have friends.
Hello :) There are a few mistakes which curiousvampire has pointed out, watch out for 'their' and 'there' and your tenses. When you say "Because I failed my last bet ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: Anarchy
In the first paragraph where it says: "A gas station had exploded obliterating an antique store next to it, and toppled traffic lights." There are two tenses going on here... ...
Dec 30, 2009