PenguinAttack

o.0 I have to say first off that this is a very long poem for no breaks. I understand that the intended flow may be altered from some distinct segmentation, ...

I thank you both for your welcome comments =] Firstly (coz its the easiest) I know I dont have to double space, I double spaced because thats how I wanted ...

I, personally, liked this poem =] I liked the way it moved easily through the stanzas/paragraphs/whatever. I also liked the way you made it rhyme in parts. Small issues come ...

Hey there, a lovely ending, although quicker than I thought it would be. I rather love your last line =] it's a nice reference. A small criticism: "His parent s ...

I am, as ever, not completely clear on the concept of genres and classiflying my work, so I threw this in here. If it's in the wrong section or whatever ...

Mnmm.. I have to agree with the above. Although I think with a little work, mainly a few capitals and such, you could greatly improve the reception of the peice. ...

Oh nice... lol. I quite liked that, and obviously look forward to the rest. As you know, if you can recall who I am =] I've seen your work, this ...

Well now, as a new member it is, obviously, my duty to chuck a 'Howdy' out there. The name is PenguinAttack, as you can clearly see, heh, but I am ...