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This is good, well; I liked it. =D I will say that I think it is a little long, just in that I felt that it should have ended at ...

Thank you all for your commentation and critiques. Helpus Majorus. hehe. I have edited (meaning blah re work hehe) and I hope i've made an in-roads into the general gist ...

Ehheheh. I was unaware that there was a Welcome thread of this kind.. which, obviously, shows my great powers of deduction and amazingful viewing of the site. eheh. I've been ...

Your harsh screams peirce the night like blades, leaving scars and slowly bleeding you dry, my love. Dry... I'm not entirely sure why, but this stanza stares out at me ...

Going PG for themes, not language or graphics necessarily. I wrote this the other night while waiting for sleep... how weird is that? o.O Edit: A re-working of the "original" ...

I have placed my gramatical and punctual corrections in italics underneath the original lines (It should be very clear :wink: ) "square on in between the eyes." " squarely between ...

Amazing, truly truly amazing. I particularily love the style of this, the sharp sentances and the descriptions. I believe this is fantastic (if you hadn't realised :) ) The only ...

Muchas Gracias Ma'am Kool, as always a kind word is all I need to *giggle* like there is no tomorrow. =D My long sentances were supposed to be purposeful (there ...

. The blocks did not speak though, that's impossible. She stared blankly out the window of the hospital, her husband rubbing her shoulders which her hospital gown hung loosely.. Hey, ...

Hey, Ferris AKA Tara ( lol) I don't think you're stupid at all. and you make much sense. Truth be told, I doubt I will be going back and attempting ...

Muchas Gracias my dear people, commentations (as well as compliments ; ) ) are always welcome and appreciated. *hearts* Le Penguin

ahahahah. I have this vague feeling, Brad, that I should be somewhat offended by the way you chose to shoot this down, but I just keep laughing, I'm not entirely ...

oooohhh Jig thinks he rocks the socks of life now doesnt he. Shh! *shifty look* just because he does doesn't mean he needs to know it! ehehehe. Seriously though (as ...

Unsure as to whether this is in the right place. I apologise if it is not. If that is the case I'll delete and repost where it's suppost to go ...

Ho-kay; hehe. I've done me some edit-type working. The archaic language should be all but gone (hopefully all.) As I understand what you were saying Ma'am Kool :wink: As you ...