PenguinAttack

Well, the above comments fill in my opinions fairly well. You tend to use names fairly often, it gets annoying and rather confusing at points, such as: “Christian’s father stood ...

I have to say I agree with the above comments, my first thought on reading “series of difficult and painful challenges.” Thought of rape, then of odd army activities, because ...

Hey there, I'll be going through all of the chapters for this story, figured I'd jump on the wagon and try to help you out a little ^.^ Obviously, from ...

Oh me, oh my, I think that is a fearsome beast I spy! :p That is a wonderful little description of the fearsome (and almost invincible) Shadows that you were ...

You're not just alone You're unloved. Trying to keep the world from falling Even when the end keeps on calling. You're not just hopeless You're lost. Collecting the love from ...

I like this, I think you have a talent for description, lovely imagery. Though in this you seem to repeat a few words fairly often, not very noticable though, so ...

Hehee Mentioned! Woot. I like the Point of View! Writing from Michaels view is a wonderful change from other characters, such a new perspective on the whole thing! I also ...

I liked this, quite a bit. Added to the general liking of the poem itself, I also happen to like The Beatles, and that song. As such I can hardly ...

Description all the way! I despise having to write conversations, so no dialogue for me (which one may notice when one reads my ficiton ^.^) I have no idea about ...

Horrid deaths, oh, nasty deaths - - lurking in the bathroom! Automatically a cute and foreboding begining, drew me in immediately. A little cord, a bit of string, Slightly, slightly ...

Oh, oh dear this made me giggle so very much. I don't know about you -or half do, from reading the comments - but I had the right sorta friends, ...

I like this, and it obviously means something. There are some qualms however; "Cover thy eyes, tell me, what is it that you seek?" "Just what it takes to make ...

Hello dear. It is wonderfully to see you join The Young Writers Society, the more the merrier no? I do hope you post like crazy, it is ever-so-good to be ...

Hallo, hallo, deary ^.^ I welcome you heartily to the folds the shroud this wonderous writing site. It seems to matter not how good you are at any one thing. ...

Whoa! I love the second of your newest! The pop art one with the gun. It is wonderful to see such talent in a form I enjoy seeing! You have ...