PenguinAttack

Wherein my sister is her usual 21yr old self. Em: What did you say about me? Me: What? Em: What did you say about me? Me: I didn't say nuffin. ...

The making of a tear is a terribly difficult job. One might tell you – if they so wished- that a tear was merely a result of chemical reactions that ...

Thankyou both LizzyG and Audy for commenting. It is most appreciated. I fixed that spelling error, thankyou grandly - I'm not a speller, in the least. I am curious as ...

I enjoyed this quite a bit. Though it took me two reads to really get the flow of the poem. I like the words you use and the style you ...

Thanks for taking the time to read the poem. ^^ I have altered the line, your suggestion being more than suitable. In the end I do think the alteration fits ...

I have to say LizzyG covered almost all I could have said. What jarred most for me were the spelling errors (I know I have my own -it's why I ...

Heys LizzyG. It took me a few reads but I think I like this. ^.^ Actually, I know I do. It's a little quirky and you have a level of ...

This amazing crash of light, barrelling from the darkness, glittering in the childlike innocence of those forgotten years. The memory hurt like the shattering of a bone. Your sordid grin ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

Emily paced her room, striding back and forth, checking the digital clock on her right in periodic spurts of crossways movement. It was taking too long. They were late. She ...

Thankyou most kindly, dear critters ^.^ All of your comments are most appreciated. I *think* I fixed the punctuation, putting it in a paragraph like that was most helpful indeed! ...

Her shoes are expensive, And match a belt wrapped around her waist. This line is confusing. "the" instead of "a" would help this make heaps more sense. Giving the illusion ...

A word whispered from miles gone by, flickering in the darkness of moments unheard, slips its way from mouth to mouth. Souls connecting in hidden agendas; moving from age to ...

Hehe, this was rather funny. ^.^ Though I wonder; . Well, I guess my weight. Another comma after "guess"? That is quite possibly just how I read it. Hehe *is ...

I happen to completely agree with Amelia on this one. Even her choices on the paragraphs (nice work ^.^). I also agree with Gladi on the treatment of Amelia. This ...