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Okay. Did you use the "Pre" feature? It keeps your previous structure and whatnot. If not, the the style may not be supported on YWs. I am unsure as to ...

Hey there Gadi. Okay, you have some good imagery here, and the sound of it is lovely at times. The main issue, right now, is the structure! Oh dear sweet ...

... a shadow? From the sound of it, the castles shadow at that. That's for six. ^^

OMG They are gone!

Let's say that Hitler DID repent for his actions during the last few seconds of his life. Should three seconds of repenting erase the deaths of thousands? Theoretically, yes. But ...

Squee!! This is even more hilarious than the first, mister minx. Not only that, but you develop characters, keep it interesting and actually have relationships and stuff that you can ...

*finally got round to the actual comment* This makes me so sad, to read. As always you do so well to bring out the right emotion in the right way ...

All suggestions taken on baord and applied! *salutes* ^^ Thanks to you both for the reviews, it's *hugely* appreicated. ^^ *Hearts* Le Penguin.

Removed.

I made the star extra bright, Letting the glitter sparkle as though It could be seen from space. It wasn’t the best star, The corners curled and the paper crinkled; ...

Hey there. I have to say, I pretty much agree with Suzanne there. There are many different techniques you can use to write a short story, and I applaud you ...

Okay, we've talked about this, but I'm here to give you some hardcopy feedback. ^^ I like the idea and I find the allusion to Icarus,and the religious allusions to ...

Pfft. Child's play. -:pirate3: I completely agree. :D *Hearts* Le Penguin.

Hey thanks everyone for the comments, they're hugely appreciated. ^^ LoveableLittleSock: Feckless: 1. ineffective; incompetent; futile: feckless attempts to repair the plumbing. 2. having no sense of

Always, my dear, you present a complete view, an image and story in so few words. The imagery is fantastic, you can feel the pulse, and the rhythm wonderfully. I ...