PenguinAttack

Hey Kylan! So. You’re an amazing writer, which I don’t think anyone is going to disagree with. You’re so amazing, really, that I felt intimidated to pick up your story ...

Hi Man, I know I’ve taken forever to do this critique, I was more busy than anticipated. What I’m going to do here is a basic line by line critique; ...

Smoogle! I really quite like this, although I can somehow tell you're still a bit hesitant. Your talent is clear, however, and I love how the narrative progresses. You've got ...

I plan on posting a series of drabbles – short works – which come from or are based on scenes in my NaNo from this year. They probably won't be ...

*Flails* I'm a massive fan of Next Generation Star Trek. I got into Voyager in a mad way this last month and I happen to love Jean Luc Picard like ...

*Moved to Fantasy Fiction*

Open your mouth, I want to see your tongue, lolling and pink against the yellowed white of your teeth. Are you using again? Have I lost you? Moments, moments, let ...

Hi Wonderingkate, Don’t be too embarrassed by this, the most amazing thing is that you’re so willing to improve on your poetry. In this poem in particular, I like how ...

Hey! My mum loves Georgette Heyer, but I've not been able to get into them just as yet. What attracted you to her books? I'm curious as to why you ...

And where shall death find thee, oh high plains drifter, when at last a bullet finds itself in your back? < Excellent first lines, they hooked me in and are ...

Imouto-chan! I haven’t reviewed in a while so I’m rusty. But! I like this. I have some suggestions and some other comments, but I want to start with the fact ...

Little Women is an excellent book, definitely. The problem here is that they're very different in what they want to say, Little Women and Pride and Prejudice. I love Pride ...

We all give excuses to live as one humanity... < Lose the ellipses as Matt suggested. Actually, I’d consider losing the entire “line” it’s not really necessary. If you wanted ...

Pgsgirl7; there's an entire thread talking about why the introduction of the review ratios. ^^ Have a look at that one (It's still in The Information Desk, I believe) and ...

Selene: In regards to the scrunching face business. That was just an example, to help with the characterisation and setting. You can have her scrunch her face when she speaks ...