PatternsInPaintChips

You have natural rhythm in your writing and I envy you that, you're obviously well read and well written also, a great way to be andd is like to say ...

This makes me think of elm trees and it's brevity feels very appropriate, short and spinning and changing direction like the seed pods it brings to mind The use of ...

I like the idea you've started with, a bit of suspense is always a good way to start a chapter or book in general, but I feel like you need ...