Parasky

So the Chinese don't get all the glory. Why does fire never point down?

Yes, left her to lore. That is why she has a poem about herself. I'm actually thinking about just cutting out that last stanza.

I've seen worse things. Like this (WARNING: IF YOU HAVE A WEAK STOMACH DO NOT CLICK THE LINK, THIS IS NOT A JOKE). Then again, the world is a cruel ...

I like this poem, but I have to say that the structure is a bit off. I like the imagery. If I can suggest something, you should do something like ...

Oh, and since nobody has review this yet I should ask; is that the right kind of "bout"? I mean "bout" as in fighting, but I'm not sure if that ...

Alright, here's the fixed/updated version that rhymes! Death and The Maiden Long ago in an age long past, In an oh-so-distant land, Lived a Maiden with beauty unsurpassed, Her life ...

Yummy, ee cumings! I'll have to read some of your poetry in the near future an give my two cents. :) Welcome to YWS! I'm sorry it took so long ...

I agree with all of you, it is nowhere near as good as The Last Crusade or Raiders of the Lost Ark, but it's way better than Temple of Doom ...

Sorry Parsky but the Review to work post ratio is 1:2 Two review per work of your own. This way evyone gets a review on their work. Church That's what ...

Thanks, I've been working on the rhyming. It's hard to change the words so they rhyme, but have the story still make sense. I tried a rhyme of 1-2-2-1, but ...

Hello Gahks, greetings from the warm, cloudy American Midwest! Well, I like to write science fiction and narrative poetry. If you read any of the poetry I posted, you'll probably ...

Death and The Maiden Once not so long ago, In an oh-so-distant land, Did a lovely maiden live, The fairest of them all was she. She came to love a ...

This thread is so lonely compared to the other warm welcomes around it...*shivers* This thread is so cold...

Wow, that's amazing. You've captured the emotion of the story so well. The actions of the characters make such a vivid imagery. The stuttering really shows the fear in the ...

Well I'm glad I got this kind of welcome... Well, I'm new here too; I registered just today as well. I might as well tell you what I've learned; -The ...