Paracosm

Good work! You were very descriptive! Just split it into stanzas, and it will be a lot easier to understand!

Good job! All I can say is work on the rhythm. I can tell you read the book though!

Good work! It was very creative!

Hmmm... It is very good, but it might be more of a short story! Other than that great job! You have a big vocabulary!

Great description! Don't take this in the wrong way, but I didn't get the meaning... You may want to elaborate! It did have very good vivid imagery!

Epic! I really liked this poem! Good job!

Good job! Very poetic and I love the description! It just took me a second to get what was going on!

That is a good idea! I might try for a short story with that one!

Lucifer Lucifer's cold laugh rang throughout the room, with a snap of his fingers he summoned a mass of fiery demons to demolish his foe! "Kill them all!" he said ...

Lucifer Lucifer stepped into the small cafe, looking for a soul to steal! "Anyone want a drink? Temptations is always on the house!", he said, smirking a bit. His tone ...

I am going back to the original to an extent, I think I am going to do something voodooesque. The only problem is, I have to have a character to ...

Martin... Again! Because the bas is a trunk monkey! Am I allowed to do what I just did?

Lucifer That's what got me into my dilemma! But yes, that is what I am after. The more the merrier!

Reporter Grace Turner from... I don't know yet! Just someone I made up who needs me to put her in a story! Q: Why do you do what you do?

Martin from Drowning in Thirst I left my dictionary in my duffel bag... Is it like some multi dimensional gateway? Why is an orange called an orange, but a banana ...