Paperwanderer

Nice take on reworking an old cliche, your characterisation is really strong and it was fun to read :)

Thanks for the awesome (thorough) review. I'll be sure to go through the nitpicks and changes soon to improve clarity. Also, I'll probably check out some of your stories (lol, ...

wait you are a new member...welcome! Thanks for the welcome and review, we're all here to improve our writing :)