Paperwanderer

This is really intriguing :) I love the description of the vial and the opening sentences. Can't wait to read more. I agree with what someone said above about the ...

You've created some strong images and a charged atmosphere that really catches the attention of the reader :) Now onto some helpful critique: Rain pounded the trees, somehow it slipped ...

Nice take on reworking an old cliche, your characterisation is really strong and it was fun to read :)

Thanks for the awesome (thorough) review. I'll be sure to go through the nitpicks and changes soon to improve clarity. Also, I'll probably check out some of your stories (lol, ...

wait you are a new member...welcome! Thanks for the welcome and review, we're all here to improve our writing :)

Author's note: This story is inspired by the ending of the Anderson fairytale in which the mermaid is transformed into an air spirit. In Anderson's version of the tale, the ...