PaperCrane

I find it unique because it's not like you're trying to copy anyone else's style. The words are uncomplicated, and mainly unemotional, but the whole thing is descriptive and poetic ...

This is really just the beginning of something, please could I have some critique, or even some ideas of how it could develop? Anything you feel is relevant. The first ...

As far as I'm concerned, this is really good, nearly perfect. I can't believe it's your first short fiction, because it flows very naturally. I also love how it's entirely ...

Never give up your style, even if you improve in future, keep an element of it because it's unique

Hi, thanks to both of you for your reviews. First of all, it really isn't vampiric, there are no descriptions of vampirism or any other supernatural force. If you find ...

Fab, can't wait to read the next version!

I was always a dreamer I dreamt of a home that smelt of bread Of sleep at night and moonlit skies Of sleep and wake and cold morning grass I ...

I turn my face from the sun I just can't face facing you anymore We've got no time, there's no time for us at all Would the sun fall If ...

This is an amazing, insightful poem. I am really impressed you wrote this even though English isn't your native language - I think that the reason I like the style ...

This is amazing! It is so descriptive, and actually quite difficult to read - but that's exactly how it should be, I think. I disagree with that long review you ...

Thank you so much, I wasn't expecting such a nice comment! That actually makes me look at it differently, because I was really writing about a person with two sides ...

I like this, and I think this poem would make good lyrics for a song. It's not particularly emotive, for me, but it's very dramatic and the language is really ...

Follow you with my eyes shut, Your shadow can’t see your face. I’m jealous of your pure heart, Jealous of your kind heart I’m your jealous shadow you can’t see. ...

Hi Hayley, I'm giving you a proper critique because no one ever has. I like your poem, but think it needs a bit of work... it is very simple and ...

I like this poem a lot, and disagree with what one person above has said about the stanzas all being about different things - the poem really tells a story ...