Panikos

Thanks so much! I completely get what you mean abouy that first scene, so I'll make sure I fix that. Thanks! :D

Thanks a lot! I'm hoping to have a lot more Dante in the next half of the chapter, so I can finally address all of the stuff I've been neglecting ...

I'm glad it helps! :D

Thanks for this! Yeah, 'dobby' is this game that's...kind of like a mix between hide and seek and tag, as far as I remember it? You designate some spot as ...

Thanks for this! Yeah, I take your point about the ending, but I'm at a bit of a loss how to do it otherwise. I can't really add much context ...

Thanks for this!!! Man, I didn't even think about Hildegarde being like 'they clearly won't want me because I can't behave', but that's a spot on reaction and I'll have ...

I can breathe out now! I'm glad this is just enough answers to sate you. Hopefully in chapter 4 I can shed a bit more light on degas - I'm ...

Thanks! Yes, I am trying to figure out myself why Hildegarde has never asked these questions before, but I've always just thought that it was a mixture of her not ...

Thanks for this! Yeah, I don't think Hildegarde even knows what's going on in her head at this point. The next chapter should delve a bit more clearly into how ...

Thanks so much for this! Yes, figuring out how to balance the mystery of posies is quite a big concern for me at the moment, because I think it's going ...

You're the second person to compare this to Never Let Me Go and yes, I can completely see the resemblence (apparently that book had an even bigger impression on me ...

Yeah, that's fair enough. Redrafting is all about figuring out what you do and don't want to include. :)

Thanks! As far as why degas is italicised, I'm going off the idea that it's a foreign word from one of their languages, while posie is derived from English (literally ...

Thanks for this! Re: posies. They are supposed to look like normal people (aside from, like, their blankness), but particularly wealthy degas like Thelsadore tend to pick the most striking ...

Yeah it's not always easy to tell whether something needs writing about, so you may as well put it all in and then figure out what you can cut. No ...