Panikos

Back again, Querencia. Just two (full) chapters left before I'm caught up! Mr. Vaughn’s absence from the shop made Finnley realize just how young Henry was. With the older man ...

Hi, Querencia. Pan sliding in for another review. “Wait!” Finnley yelled frantically . It's already plenty obvious that he's frantic. hey were riding downhill at breakneck speed — a speed ...

Hiya, Lightsong. Sorry it's taken me a while to get round to this! Usual drill - small comments, overall thoughts, grammar corrections in blue . Small Comments Ilami met Felaris ...

Hi, Querencia! Could it be that I'm actually catching up?? I think it might just be happening. Finnley knew that were it Mia in his place, she would be sprinting ...

Hi, ShadowVyper! I reviewed chapter one of this a while back, so I might have forgotten a few things since then, but I thought I'd drop in and critique this ...

Hiya, Querencia. Slidin' in for another critique. The forest was right at the end of the street, and there were no roads into it, so they went on foot rather ...

Hi, Querencia! Back again to review. “Come on, Monica,” Finnley said. “We need to get to Mia’s house, make sure her parents know.” “You know it won’t help,” Monica warned. ...

Yo, Querencia! I'm back again to review. I've officially read all of the chapters now, but I've still got to scramble to critique them all, so let's get to it. ...

Hi, BlueAfrica! Pan dropping in to review this (GREAT) chapter. Small Comments He’d plummeted over the cliffs on Dominion’s edge, [which were] higher and more jagged than they were in ...

Hi, BlueAfrica. Pan dropping in for a quick review. Small Comments “Can I get a room?” Dan asked abruptly, looking at the floor as if he knew this would be ...

Hi, Terylpatton2000! Welcome to YWS! I'm Pan and I'll be sautéing up a quick review for you today. Okay, so the first thing that struck me about this piece was ...

Hiya, BlueAfrica. Pan dropping in for a review. Let's get cracking. Small Comments The Royal Crown Hotel was a Victorian building that had seen better days. It had more spires ...

Hi, kman134. Pan dropping in to help you shift this from the Green Room. I haven't read the first chapter, but hopefully I should be able to get to grips ...

Hi, Querencia. Pan dropping in for another review! “Are you okay after last night? I know the nightmare was really bad…” I continue to be confused that Finnley still hasn't ...

Hi, ShadowVyper. Happy Review Day! Because this chapter is so polished, I don't really have any small comments, so I'm just going to focus on more general areas and tell ...