PandyBear528

Hey! Okay so i like where you are going with this, but even though im fifteen, i am still out of the loop. Does 'win her' mean...*ehem*???? Haha. Just wondering. ...

I think this is a good story! You really, are keeping it a mystery. One thing is i dont know if this is a boy or girl...that kind of confused ...

dannnnggggg, JACKIE YOU MET MY FRIEND!!! :)

dannnnggggg, JACKIE YOU MET MY FRIEND!!! :)

hahah sorry Jackie! I didnt do the stars this time! too lazy, if you want me to keep doing them please tell me, i don't want you mad at me! ...

I was looking around last year for tips on writing. You USE to have a page for that, but not anymore. I finally decided to make one two days ago ...

I thought it was good :) I enjoyed reading it...and since it seems like everyone posted most of the nit picky mistakes I really have anything to say except... GOOD ...

Okay, good story. I liked it a lot. I especially liked how it was a dream :) Some editing:: --Looking back over my shoulder I frowned, and head back up ...

I like this story a lot. I think maybe you should add a little bit more history to the pain she caused doing the rain. Possible even more detail to ...

I read the link and i think i would have been able to follow even if i hadn't read it! I think you should keep "Carmen" a mystery, maybe to ...

___ This is a story my friend and I wrote randomly when we were bored...please review!! The stars were when it changed from me to her. (I start off) OH ...