PandaRawr

Words flashed across the screen, back and forth we talked. I stayed strong when you said you loved her. And when I told you to be happy, I ment it. ...

Ok. I lved the first chapter and I still do, but reading over it I found one thing. It goes for both chapters. Description. You need more of it. Lengthen ...

In a bed of darkness my mind sleeps. Where evil hides and trouble creeps. My dark desire I can not fill but temtation's always on mind. I fight back the ...

Okay. I like the twist you put in with not being all romantic on us. I'll always be the biggest cheesiest romantic you'll meet but I think the whole world ...

First I will say Jar of Hearts is one of my favorite songs, and I love what you did with it. The whole thing from the friends POV made this ...

I completely loved this. The fact that through the whole story he seemed a little crazy just adds to the greatness of it. I think though that even though this ...

I'm not sure I understood the point of this. I understnad that Parker is an outcast, that he is misunderstood. I understand that Grover, his little brother, is the only ...

Okay, the first half of this that was talking about how you couldn't write a letter to an old friend confused me because you seemed to do it so well. ...

Wow. I really loved this. Maybe more than anything I've ever read. Right now I am tearing up. It's like I wrote this. I swear by the skies above that ...

Well first point. Do you plan to continue this, or is the end? If it is it seemed kind of pointless. It was funny, but didn't have a conflict or ...

I love that this was not cliche. The "narrator" we shall called it, noted that it was dry with other people (which I'm gaining can also be used as a ...

This was short but I think its for the best. Lots of long poems lose meaning with length. they dtrech words and bend them trying to one more line onto ...

Okay this was interesting to a degree. There was just a hint of anything intersting happening and that's why I kept reading. onestly if I had known how you were ...

Wow. This is really good. I am thouroughly enjoying this story. I did find some grammer mistakes but nothing note worthy. I love what your doing with Hades. If I'm ...

all i have to say is ............more! please keep me informed when you post more and plese do. post more i mean!