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Wow! I must say, this a great work. This is the first work I've ever read by you, and I loved it. Now, to start with the review: 1) "This ...

Alrighty, first things first. The redundancy of the phrase beginnings. It's was mostly You seem to think, or You know nothing. Why not try to spice it up a little ...

Hello! I love your story, and I think it is very well written. I could find very few errors, but here they are: 1) You started your sentences with 'I' ...