OxfordandOnyx

You say sharks I think Shark Tale

You get a football pitch (: -inserts coin-

It's great that you are adding in improvements and taking all comments on board! If you are trying to use sentences that conveyed strong messages make sure you read it ...

Hello there (: Nice little story you've made up here So, I just thought I would drop in a small review! So, your main character's best friend died eight years ...

Hi Legacy (: It's nice to meet you! This is definitely a great place to improve on your writing and vocab. I find reading and review other people's work is ...

This is an interesting piece of work and you use great descriptive sentences. A few nit-picks. "Behind me, way too close behind me..." Try deleting the 'way', it sounds very ...

Hi there (: I just thought I would quickly read your story and I am very glad I did. I find this story to be very different from others I ...

(: Hello, this is a really nice picture you've taken! The black background is very different and the angel- eye catching but it would be better with a more blurred ...

You get a farm with lots of animals! :D -inserts coin-

Yepp TUBM likes chicken

you say crazy dreams, I think nightmares

2/10- I am not a Jim C fan- at all Knowing

You say cuddly zombie buddies, I think dead

No, I've just finished a very breif one :P TUBM is starting to get a bit tired.

No, I've just finished a very breif one :P TUBM is starting to get a bit tired.