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First things that stand out The first thing I notice is your grammar, punctuation and spelling. In short, there are errors. Shortening words fits with the feel and vibe of ...

First Thoughts The first thing that stands out like a sore thumb is the rhyme scheme. The first thing about making poetry that rhymes is that it often sounds forced, ...

First Impressions Punctuation, punctuation, punctuation! This piece is screaming for editing and begging you to add proper punctuation to it. Just because this is poetry, does not mean you get ...

First Impressions I love the idea of comparing a love interest to chocolate, but you didn't make the metaphor work here. The layout is interesting, but the lack of Poetic ...

First Impressions Well first off, if you're using the lack of correct punctuation and capitalization as a literary technique, it's not working with this particular piece. I suggest perhaps going ...

First Impressions Well the flow was consistant, which is lovely, but some parts felt very very very forced. Even in poetry with rhyme you don't want it to sound like ...

Punctuation, Spelling, and Grammar Well after reading this I get the impression it may be a good idea for you to review your basic punctuation and spelling. It's always a ...

You can't blame your lack of understanding on my ability to write. Haha, which is quite sad when you think about it. Go read more, go watch more movies, go ...

First Impressions First hint, and it's one you'll hear a lot around these parts, show, don't tell. This entire first part is all tell and no show at all. It's ...

YAAAAY!!! *glomps teh Chiko*

Love and hate. Cupid and fate. To laugh. To lie. To learn how to fly! After the first stanza I can tell that your word choice is based off of ...

Ressa (sorry for the short length, just got off work and I am beat, but I’d also like to say that everyone needs to be keeping up with the discussion ...

Also! Just a note, it was stated that people shouldn't be the same color of magic, now we have two people that are dark purple (almost black) and two people ...

I'd be interested in joining, just not sure where to start with creating a character lol. Working on it though.

Hey guys, I took it upon myself to make a discussion thread ^.^