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As always you point out a lot of great things! I'll definitely be reading through your critique a few more times to really get the good stuff out of it. ...

Hey Lim! Thanks a bunch for the review! Something I think I will say at this point (since you mentioned the passive nature of Alisha and June's characters and the ...

Thanks a ton for the review! You and Liminality and Spearmint have been instrumental in helping me improve this story! You mentioned fewer thought processes from him, and I think ...

Thanks so much Lim! Your feedback was most definitely helpful and I definitely do have some changes to make. I will add real quick regarding the comments you made about ...

Thanks again for the read! Even if there's not a lot I can/need to change it's always helpful. And I've been noticing your reviews on later chapters, don't worry! I'm ...

And almost forgot! But at the end of the previous chapter it was mentioned there were people inside the church, but I suppose another mention of it in this chapter ...

Hey Lim! Holy crap, a lot of this is super helpful! I didn't realize so many "errors" I guess you could call them located throughout this chapter. I definitely need ...

Hey Birdman, thanks for the review! I do have some responses to some of the comments you made, if you don't mind. Regarding the ellipsis (thanks for the word, I ...

Ooooh, lots of feedback, noice! Action scenes aren't always my specialty and while I seem to be writing some aspects pretty well there is definitely more I could improve on ...

Appreciate the review! I definitely try to move a story along at the right pace but still include as much action and info without it feeling overwhelming, and I'm definitely ...

Thanks a lot for the valuable feedback, as always! It's always the little things, the brief moments of weird grammar or wording, but sometimes it's other aspects. But glad you ...

I do certainly write in plenty of details on purpose recurring or otherwise (although on rare occasion those details are actually happy accidents!). I am glad that various moments and ...

Hey Spearmint! Thanks a ton for the review! Seems I do have a couple of little itty bitty things to change and clarify, but I've come to always expect that ...

I definitely had to rely on a lot of show, don't tell for this particular chapter/parts of this chapter, and I'm glad to see that spending a little extra time ...

Always love hearing about your thoughts at certain parts as always! It is nice seeing so many perspectives on how people react to or think about the story. At the ...