Oshmiester

Well a very nice someone on YWS recommended I read this and I wasn't dissapointed. I had in my head a plan to go through your story and analyse every ...

Very,very good. I really enjoyed this. There is loads of internal conflict in this and it's all written very well, I dont think theres any reason to be worried about ...

It's perfect as a stand alone. It's may not be technically complete (Doesn't have a clear begining,middle,end etc.)but it evokes all sorts of feelings in the reader. The description and ...

Ok first off in the twentieth paragraph you said Quote: “Something felt out of place today around the palace. Kai couldn’t shake the feeling that something was wrong, and his ...

I enjoyed it! Perhaps to little to go on for me to give much constructive criticism,and everything I can think of has been said already. In general pretty good...revenge is ...