Oshmiester

Just so you know lads this has no relation to my previously written piece. Prologue A Shadow moved up the wall. It would take the keenest eye to see its ...

Well a very nice someone on YWS recommended I read this and I wasn't dissapointed. I had in my head a plan to go through your story and analyse every ...

Very,very good. I really enjoyed this. There is loads of internal conflict in this and it's all written very well, I dont think theres any reason to be worried about ...

My great passion is surfing. Next to that being in the sea.I like to attempt drawing.I enjoy reading(of course).I am passionate about Music-The great communicator.I attempt the playing of many ...

It's perfect as a stand alone. It's may not be technically complete (Doesn't have a clear begining,middle,end etc.)but it evokes all sorts of feelings in the reader. The description and ...

Sorry guys the paragraphs are a little scrappy as I transfered this by e-mail from an old hit me with any silly mistakes and I'll get to correcting straight away. ...

Ok first off in the twentieth paragraph you said Quote: “Something felt out of place today around the palace. Kai couldn’t shake the feeling that something was wrong, and his ...

I enjoyed it! Perhaps to little to go on for me to give much constructive criticism,and everything I can think of has been said already. In general pretty good...revenge is ...

I think what a Joy it is to be alive,and I wonder if I'll ever leap inward to the root of this flesh and know myself as once I was.The ...