OphelieLiv

I agree with Jennya, this would make a fantastic poem. Some structure would be good also (although I do realise it's a rant - and those do tend to be ...

That was certainly an entertaining read. The characters were fantastically portrayed and you can get an essence of their relationships within the first few paragraphs - you've got talent, en ...

Haha I thoroughly enjoyed that as a Kingdom of Loathing player. It had a sense of iambic pentameter, which I'm not sure whether I'm imagining. But either way, I really ...

Hey there Rayneisthename, Charlii101, theotherone and DanielRichard. Thank you for your advice, I'll certainly be changing a few things. I was trying to give the story the feeling of that ...

Very good story, and entertaining! You didn't lose me for a second. I'd perhaps elaborate in some parts, add a little bit more description of the mountains and such. But ...

Hello there, I only have a few of things to say, I enjoyed reading your descriptive piece. Firstly, "The Sun’s sister’s light falls down upon me." is a wonderful sentiment ...

I'm new, have mercy? ~OphelieLiv It's an empty room except for a single fluorescent light struggling against the darkness. It knows that just like everything else, slowly it'll be consumed ...