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Here to review for you :) I don't know what to say about these paragraphs. I can't say that I was pulled in at the very beginning. It just seemed ...

Hello, I have been here for about three days and have two entries, Eternal Dragons in Fantasy and The Rebellion Series Part 1 in Science Fiction. Constructive Criticisim will be ...

I have never heard such details, it really grabbed my attention from the beginning. I like how you described the main character and his situation enough for the reader to ...

LOL if you don't wanna do a website, just do random stuff like sounding out random things or do something like throw a spoon down stairs and see what sounds ...

I like this story a lot, and I can tell that you are going to make more for it because of the name of the post :) One thing that ...

Oh sorry if I didn't mention this before, but my main character, Nicolae, I actually meant for him to be a male :)

BTW: I will only post the second chapter if anyone wants me to, no use in putting effort into a useless story. :) It would be helpful if anyone would ...

Chapter 1 “Wake up, sunshine!” Lileame said as he entered my room. “The sun is up, and so should you, there is work to be done, you know.” “I know, ...

I cannot say much except that when you are doing a two-sided dialougue, you wann start a new paragraph each time the other person is talking. Makes it easier to ...

Thanks for the reply, it really helps. Really lol. Basically the reason why this isn't detailed very much is because I wrote this part about two years ago. Right now, ...

I love this scene right here! Reall gets the blood pumping. If you make this into a book, I have a feeling it will be great. I like how you ...

BTW: There is more to this chapter, and if you want me to put it on there then let me know :)

[*]This is my first time putting my stories on a site, so I ask you all to review and tell me if I should further this story, thank you[*] Chapter ...