OceanGirl

Its good I liked it! the thing is that it gives a brief description of what's happening as Bluesquare mentioned but you could exaggerate a bit more.

heyy Blackwood! your poem was pretty good and the most impotant thing its small! I love small poems. everything is just fine you can concentrate on the above comments! have ...

its a good poem!!! which gives the reader good emotional feelings.I liked the part of the hamster. its little sad but a vey good poem!!!

Its an amazing poem!!! i love it so much!!!!