ODonovan

I know exactly where you are coming from with the whole school assignment with restrictions thing. But i think you did a good job making due with what you had. ...

Short and sweet. My only suggestion would be focusing more on the separation between Neyri and Jamie, including her scorn at the beginning and her fear when she jumps back. ...

First off, very nice job taking an unconventional, be it disturbing, twist on "romantic short story." The use of internal conflict was powerful when first introducing the characters. My only ...