Noelle

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! This is a great start. I'm glad that you didn't make the prolouge a whole seperate post since it was so short. It fit in ...

Hi there! This was a really good piece, but I definitely think there are too many cuss words in it. I understand what you were going for, but you could've ...

Hi there! This was a very good read. You deveolped your character very well and even had me feeling bad for her. Your descriptions were good, quite realistic actually. I'm ...

Hi there! This was a great piece. I liked how you made Natalia think Jesus was a stalker. It added to the suprise she felt when she realized who He ...

Hi there! I'll start off by saying I can tell you put a lot of emotion into this piece. You did a great job displaying the anger and you described ...

9/10. Beautiful! Is that a horse?

Hi there! Wow...this was great! It pulled me in and kept me reading right through to the end. I think you should get inside Charlotte's mind more, tell us what ...

Hi there! This was a great story. I felt like I was actually in the character's head and I could feel the pain he felt. I like how you looked ...

Hi there! I love this!! It was written very well and kept me interested throughout the whole piece. I am a HUGE Harry Potter fan, so I was excited to ...

Marcus Carter was sitting in his room, trying to focus on his english summer assignment. It was due the next day, also known as the first day of his senior ...

Edited from before. I also made it a chapter instead of a prolouge. It makes more sense as a chapter. It was the last day of summer vacation and Kendall ...

Hi there! I really enjoyed this. The words are great and it all flows together so well. The general idea is good. Your rhyme scheme is off though. At the ...

Hi there! I'm here to review as requested! I enjoyed this, but it left me with a lot of questions. To me, instead of being a 150 word story, this ...

Hi there! First Drawing: This is a very colorful drawing. I think you should find a shade of yellow between the shades you used. I think the shade of the ...

Hi there! This is a great start! I like the fact that it started off with a bang. I'm glad you got right into it at the beginning. I really ...