Noelle

Hi there! This is a great beginning. I like how you wrote this more of like a poem than a story. It's different. Most prolouges are in story form and ...

Hi there! I am a gym rat, I take offense to this! Nah, I'm kidding. :) Although as a college athlete, I probably will feel this way in a couple ...

Hi there! Let me start off by saying that there is an awful lot of imagery in this. When I started reading this I thought there was a good bit ...

Where were you when our lives stood still- did you see the smoke, the black cloud engulfing the city? Where were you when so many lives ended- could you feel ...

Hi there! I really like you're opening. It's great how you started out with S telling Kait top end it. Once you said that, the reader was pulled in. They're ...

Hi there! (again) I don't want to say this is much better because the original was good too, but this is great! I'm impressed that you went back and edited ...

Hi there! So, here's some comments I have: I see it all again: the melancholy way he spoke at our last meeting, that night where I had to pick him ...

Hi there! Wow...this is great! I love the way you really got into your character's head and showed us what was happening through his eyes. Your descriptions are great and ...

Name: Alicia Spinnet Age: 15 Gender girl For or Against: For Rank/Title/Occupation orphan Appearance: She's short for her age, only around 4'9" (four inches below the average height). She has ...

Hi there! Wow...this is great! I absolutely love this poem. The flow of this is great. It has a definite rhythm to it and I could hear it as I ...

Hi there! I really like this. I know exactly what kind of people you are talking about here (you know, with the whole quiet thing). Some of my friends are ...

Hi there! So all the things I was going to comment about, Jash seems to already have done. -_-' So I'm simply just going to comment on the overall feel ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! That day insert comma here opening that that text message, was probably the single worst thing that ever happened to me. Just a few small ...

Hi there! This is a very powerful piece. I'm glad you decided to write a story about this. It's a very tragic event that I still cannot seem to wrap ...

Can you save a spot for a female orphan please? I'll post the profile by tomorrow at the latest.