Noelle

Check out the prolouge if you want. You don't need to read it to understand this chapter though. The woods were scary that night. Leslie held tight to Cody as ...

"Look, look there are kids down there!" A sigh came from around the corner. "Anita, that's the fourth time you've claimed that someone has come close to--" "No, really, look!" ...

Hi there! This chapter was pretty good. I feel like you could've added more to the story, though. At the beginning, I expected this to be about Lee's inner struggle ...

Hi there! I enjoyed reading this poem. It has good imagery and I can definitely feel the emotion in this. The flow of this is good too, there's not place ...

Hi there! Well, to be honest, I'm completely confused. I'm not really sure what this is about or why you wrote it. But, I guess it's supposed to be that ...

Hi there! Wow, this is a really great piece! I can really feel the emotion in this. You did a great job really describing this situation and really digging deep ...

Hi there! First off I want to let you know that your avatar is EPIC! I really like it. :) Anyway, this poem is pretty epic in itself. There's not ...

Hi there! Lee began to pack up her old and worn sleeping bag, ignoring the disapproving ogles of passer byes . I'm not sure that you should use the word ...

Hi there! Just to let you know, I was very excited to read this. Really, I was! And I just wanted to say that it definitely lived up to the ...

Hi there! Wow, this is great! I really love it! *clicks like button* As Blue said before me, this sounds just like a psalm. You did a good job with ...

Hi there! It was magic, the way they gripped each other, I love this. It's a great description of what the kid thought about the blocks. Sure when we're older, ...

Hi there! Welcome to the site! This is a great start. There's a lot of description in this chapter, no dialouge, but it all works out fine. Speaking of that, ...

Hi there! Wow, these are great! I'm pretty sure I looked at each of them twice. My favorite is the one with the clothespins. It's very colorful. I like the ...

Hi there! This poem is great! It's reads very well and I can't find a place where the flow falters. You don't have very much imagery, but it works out ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! My corrections are in violet below. No one knew it was Lee’s her birthday and she Lee liked it that way; less attention. If you ...