Noelle

Hi there! I definitely think this is in the right category. It's about teleporting after all, yes? That's a certain aspect of science fiction. So, this is a good story. ...

Hi there! This is a really good poem. It flows well and has good emotion. I like it because, evern though it's Dramatic Poetry, it still seems to be telling ...

Hi there! I really like this poem. It's quite unique and is very interesting. It flows well and is quite catchy. You said you were going to read this aloud, ...

Hi there! This is a cute story. In a good way, of course. My dad sounds exactly like the father. He never wanted any pets, but we finally convinced him ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I really like this! I really enjoy reading narrative poetry because it's the best of both worlds. It's a story that focuses on imagery and ...

My top three: music smart, word smart and people smart. The music bar was almost full which isn't suprising. My dad's side of the family is super musical.

Hi there! You must have edited this since the last comment because you definitely have paragraphs in this. It is important that you have paragraphs to represent a new idea ...

Hi there! My comment/corrections are in violet below: This type of insanity is new to me insert semi-colon here incomprehensible. The light dances off his crystal eyes. Awareness is crowned ...

Hi there! A few nitpicks: The son of God was sent from Heaven to save the world as our hero and ruler. Some things I liked: He died for our ...

Hi there! Oh my gosh, I love your username!! Anyway, my comments/corrections are in violet below: Spring has come and all animals stir, the old calico is now shedding her ...

Hi there! My comments/corrections are in violet below: -- Amid the roaring waves he stood Amid the raging storm he stood Good repetition. A fell vision Hm, what's a fell ...

Hi there! My comments/corrections are in violet below: Verse 1: Daring you reach out, Depending on what you want to say in this sentence, it needs to be worked on. ...

Hi there! My comments/suggestion are in violet below: Though forged in the fires of mountains fell and born of a Dark Lord's luminal research these first two lines are really ...

The ringing phone filled her with dread. Palms sweating, Kelli brought the phone up to her ear. “Hello?” “Mrs. Mitchell,” a man’s voice came over the speaker. “We have suspicion ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! From the first stanza, I was drawn into this poem. I love the beginning where you repeated the word 'books'. I know it's a small ...