Nimphal

That Veronica is some trouble maker :P Now, there were some tiny typos here and there, but I think I'm going to skip them. This part of the chapter is ...

For something you just came up with this is brilliant. I like Violet, you've given her realistic character and she is so 'the woman behind the man' :) Nothing much ...

So, love only in fiction, eh? I like the piece, because I could feel a connection to the main character, though I didn't believe in romance either. I must admit ...

Motor racing, hell yeah! That aside, I loved the way you found the golden middle between description and action. Comparing one of the girls to Rihanna is quite nicely thought ...