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Its nice, but your description still lacks. I had the same problem, but it all worked out. How did Nara end up in the bedroom, magic? you gotta describe that ...

its nice! i would just wanna know their ages and personalites, and add more description to everything! the plot is good, you just need the DETAILS! i blew me away ...

I loved it, but for me the MC was way too excited about this. I think you can do better than this. The beginning can be more better, more slower ...

Walking home takes forever. At least it's almost summer. The winter weather still wants to rest here and the spring just lets it. The cold wind blows my hair as ...

Chapter 4 The radio blasts Emily Osment. We are playing the Indiana Jones: Lego Edition on my Xbox 360. “Come on Indi!” I yell at the TV. “Jump, jump!” Colin ...

I need help w/ that. I wanna change the genre but don't know how. HELP!

This is amazing! I loved it so much! I'm gonna sing this instead! Nike :)

i like it. its nice. just it sometimes in some parts sound like a list "He did this" "I went there" I had that problem too, but you have it ...

All of my clothes flood my room while I look for the perfect outfit. Colin and his family are coming to visit for a while; but I still have got ...

again, i have to say it was amazing! just edit the parts that the writers above me said because i dont wanna have to repeat. I loved it! Nike :)

I loved this! the description is perfect, everything was amazing! If it were a movie i would try to get the MC role. Nike :)

Chapter 2 3 Months Later My phone rings and I answer it. “Hello,” I say. “Hey, tell your mom to come to my office.” my dad says. I get up ...

its nice. i wouldnt read these types of things unless its by the actual author of the book. i know J.K. Rowling made Harry and Ginny, Ron and Hermionie; but ...

its nice, i love thrillers. you had many eroors but the writers above explained them all. I hope you continue writting! i liked it alot, im an American so some ...

i can't wait for the next chapter! it was good! just be more descriptive and re-read your post before you post it! Because you said that her first period was ...