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why isnt anybody commenting? you read it; yes i like that but i would REALLY wanna know what you think! Nike :) P.S.- Thanks.

Chapter 7 4th of July has always been a great holiday in our family. We all gathered at our house letting the pool get filled with water ready for the ...

i loved it! It was amazing! I think you've got something really good here. I agree with KD and the rest of the writers above me though. You do have ...

okay; this is great but i hate the non detail issue. You have no discription to anything such as: Characters, MC, houses, places. YOU NEED THAT. it will fill your ...

Chapter 6 Ke$ha’s Tik Tok fills my ears bringing me in a dancing mood. “Wake up in the mornin’ feelin’ like P Ditty,” I sing I make my pencil beat ...

I'm finally back home from the theater-Zack came with me, I walk out of the bathroom feeling fresh from the Movie Theater uniforms. “Hey,” I tell Zack who is sitting ...

I agreewith Tiger and LovableLittleSock. But i thought that this was so breathtaking and romantic. Your MC and characters were thrown in, you need description of places and characters! I ...

for your first time its not that bad. did you ever write before this? its good really. but you need to describe more in everything and characters. to tell you ...

Nice. I forgot to add something in all my replies- you need more description! This is key! Right now i have NO clue where this takes place (city, coutry) how ...

i like\d it. You had some errors here. You have to keep your tences the same, you moved from Past Tence to Present Tence in 1 pargraph -- and you ...

i love these kind of stories, it took my breath away. But i agree with Sachi. You should edit some parts, i was lost. Just edit and PM me when ...

i lost interest. I dont wanna be the bad guy here or anything but i hate the 16-year-old pregnancy story, it happened before. I agree with all the writers above ...

i lost interest. I dont wanna be the bad guy here or anything but i hate the 16-year-old pregnancy story, it happened before. I agree with all the writers above ...

I agree fully with Ester Sylvester. You need work here, we've read these kind of things many times. Make it more interesting. Overall: Nice, i loved reading it and cant ...

Chapter 5 I look around the movie theater and see a whole bunch of paparazzi around me. “What the hell are they doing here?” I ask Colin. This small movie ...