Niebla

@xDudettex, Thank you so much for the welcome and the review. I completely agree with just about everything that you've said and will definitely take your suggestions on board to ...

Thank you @paraperson, I'm really glad you like it and your tips are really helpful. I'll definitely use them to try and improve this sometime soon! :) ~MorningMist~

Hello, First of all, I did like it overall, although I think you could make a lot of improvements to it. It was a nice children's story; meaning that it ...

Thank you @Chicken, I'm really glad you liked it. ;) ~MorningMist~

Thank you @limegreenleopard. I'm glad you liked it! :) I agree, poor Ester; it was just too easy to kill her. Thank you so much for the review, ~MorningMist~

No. Her under-developed body lies spread eagled on the surface. Her tiny fingers are reaching out towards me. Stop this. She is covered in blood, wrapped in the link which ...

“Come on! Just a bit further…I know where I’m going.” Overgrown trees shadowed their faces. Gravel and earth crunched underneath their feet. It was almost night-time, the summer sky gradually ...

If I can't decide on a name, I look on baby name sites or flick through the phone book (what else? :wink: ) I usually struggle with last names more, ...

I like this piece. The atmosphere and the words and expressions you use flow quite nicely. First of all, there are a few things I would point out: I can ...

In my opinion this story was okay. I definitely liked some parts of it, but personally it's not the kind of thing I'd usually read because it's very typical-teenager, if ...

Well done with this; I really, really like it. I love the phrases you used and the atmosphere they created, but most of all I love the dialogue: it flows ...

I liked it. I liked the general idea of the story and the way you tried to create an atmosphere of suspense, but I have to admit that there were ...

It was past midnight and her remaining time was trickling away from her like sand pouring from a broken hourglass. She sprinted along the deserted path, lit dimly by yellow ...