Niebla

Hello youngtalentkritz, I think this poem would be a lot better if you seperated it out into stanzas. A good way to see if a poem flows well or not ...

As you will soon see if you read the poem below, this is basically a very tragic story told through a series of twenty-four haikus, one for each hour. Warning: ...

Her mind burns with a terrible, restless desire At night, when all is quiet apart from my mind. When the light is dwindling and the Shadows are longer than this ...

Hey Sparkyrox2, I'm here to help with the grammar and punctuation side of things! Lyricalias has already said a lot of the things I wanted to say. This isn't bad, ...

Hey tanya98, First of all, I want to say that I've read a little of this and I think that you're not a bad storyteller - you seem to have ...

Hey dogs, I really like this! I found that the poem flowed really well when I was reading it and I love the images it brought to mind. Although it ...

Scarlet Ivory A bittersweet tune filled the room, pouring out a little of her anxiety, and a little of her soul. Her fingers danced wildly across the ivory keys. She ...

Hey TheScratchMan, I love this! I think that the previous reviewers pointed out the only small errors that were there, so I really can't find anything wrong with it at ...

This was absolutely amazing. The writing has real voice and character to it, and the story is heart-breakingly true. This is the kind of short story which really grips the ...

Whoa! I loved the twist there at the end ... it literally made me jump for a moment! The way you wrote it, you'd never have guessed from whose point ...

I think this is really well done. You explored the subject without inserting too many of your own opinions and offending anybody. I love the way that you've told the ...

The last two reviewers have already said a lot of the things I wanted to say, but I still thought I'd review this quickly - because I really liked it. ...

Hey RachaelElg, I read this yesterday, but I didn't have the time to review it. However, ever since I woke up this morning, that line "it is yesterday" has been ...

Hey there, I wasn't sure whether I should post this or not. I have about 70,000 words of this story, all of which needs quite a bit of revising. I ...

Hey there, I wasn't sure whether I should post this or not. I have about 70,000 words of this story, all of which needs quite a bit of revising. I ...