Niamh

What a wonderful time period to work with--and Fritigern I am very facsinated by, as well as the whole Visigothic culture. I haven't yet had time to read this but ...

This is cute, and has a lot of potential. I think the idea is completely original and worth working on. The rhyming isn't very organized, and the vocabulary could perhaps ...

Oh do you now? Well we'll just have to look into that won't we? yea. (read that as a joke) Personally, I think that might not be the best thing.

I liked the Silmarillion better than the trilogy as well. It has so many ties to Norse mythology, which made it even better for me because I'm a Norse mythology ...

Wow, what a great start! I really liked this. Religious persecution is always a topic of interest to me. By the way, this would be easier to read if you ...

Okay, to start, this is still great. I'm glad you updated it. But I have a few suggestions: Maybe this is just me, because I'm a freak about making a ...

This is very good. It was very interesting, and the tone of your writing and dialogue perfectly fit the time period--it was all very formal. Perhaps the repition was on ...

This has a lot of potential. You definitely have a good start, but there is room for improvement. I hope my suggestions can help you: The snow still fell after ...

Great imagery--I know you've heard that already--but that's a good thing. I love the last stanza. This isn't usually the kind of poem that would intrigue me, but I think ...

This is a very good story, with perfect imagery, and even better portrayal of Anthony's emotions. But you asked for a critique of your dialogue, and the only comment I ...

What is good about this story is that you say it is a fantasy, but it begins with much more substance than a few dragons and magic wands. We get ...

This was very nicely written, but I have a few suggestions: frankly, it was too damn hard. In a narrative as beautifully written as this, there is little need for ...

Wow--this really encapsulates the feeling of a dream--uncomfortably familiar and unnatural. I liked it. It's very different from anything else currently posted, which is a good thing. Strawberry blond

This is a wonderful sonnet. The rhyming is perfect, because it does not sound forced, and the words flow very easily, as if it was meant to be read aloud. ...

Such stunning imagery--this poem is almost perfect. The only thing I can suggest is taking out "you turned me into a liar" and leaving it as " . . . ...