Nexus

Thanks, I'll take that on board, while some bits you got rid i might have kept, i suppose I do agree with you on your general point. Thanks

^^ Ok hehe i thought it might have been mixed terms between UK and America or something.

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I go to school with Arclight lol

No by Year seven he means--- Grade 7,

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I think that 7 year old bit is a bit harsh...

not realy :) just a random name for the protagonist

But thanks anyways :)

Ah yes but if i took out Akin the whole book would make no sense, as i said it is an extract, not just a random paragraph, if you see ...

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Okay, this is an extract from a book I'm currently writing, just wanted some clarity as I'm not sure whether to continue with it or not. ~~~~Extract from Chapter 9~~~~ ...

Ok, I'll edit it, thanks.

thanks

Yes, but i still thought it was quite powerful.