NerdBurga

First off, well done! I like this poem because it is about love, but it's also very optimistic. Let me get the constructive criticism out of the way, but just ...

Thankyou for your advice haha :) I know it sounds a bit emo, but I suppose that's what the atmosphere of the poem is meant to be. As to your ...

So first of all, well done on writing such a big piece :) Just a few things I thought to point out: First of all, you need to work on ...

I wrote this for a friend of mine. I know it's a bit sketchy but hopefully some advice will help me to improve it :) And I don't know how ...

Just so you know, this isn't from personal experience, I just made it up. Hope it's ok :) They call you playa, I call you scum And lucky for me, ...

This poem had a great message in it, very touching :) I will just point out a few things, I hope I don't seem to critical "I wore the dress ...

Thanks, I might put up a final edited one soon Your advice really helped guys! I hope I get a few more comments :) Oh and yes, this poem is ...

I admit it's not great, but when I get inspiration, I have to write :) Please give me your honest opinion, I would love to be able to improve It's ...

A really touching poem, one that makes the reader have a deep think. I would just like to point out a few things: I stand the grave of Tina McKlur. ...

These posts are really helpful, I am really learning how to improve. And no you didn't sound harsh :) Thanks for your help guys

I really like this poem and can relate to the author's feelings. Just remember to start every line of the poem with a capital letter. There isn't much else for ...

Wow I loved this :) It had a great sensitivity to it and I loved the way you just casually got round to explaining that you were another couple, instead ...

This story really sucked me in. I loved how I had a sense of what was going to happen, and yet I felt like I had no idea. It got ...

This poem really got to me, it made me think of some problems I've been going through and it touched me, so for that I thankyou :) I think you ...

She sat in bed, a place where she had not left for 2 days. Never had she felt this depressed or lonely. Every time she closed her eyes she would ...