NerdBird

Thank you for this! :) I've already made some changes based on your advice! :) Lori's fear and apprehensiveness shows through a lot more now and I've made it so ...

Thank you! This was so helpful! I hadn't even noticed the choppyness! I'm so glad you liked it! :)

*bows* Thank you steampowered! ^-^ I'm hoping that once I've finished with False Gods, this will be the next piece I work more on which is why I valued your ...

Thank you so much! ^-^ I'd love it if you could review the beginning of Sons of the Serpents!: Do let me know if there's anything I can review for ...

I'm actually ridiculous glad you pointed out the Robin style nature of Cass. There's a reason behind it I assure you ;) though I may tone him down a touch ...

Edited based on suggestions ^-^

Edited based on suggestions ^-^

Edited based on suggestions ^-^

Edited based on suggestions ^-^

Edited based on suggestions ^-^

Edited it based on suggestions! :D

I am really considering following Marks path and making this into an interesting mini series :) Got a lot of ides buzzing round my head for Mark, as well as ...

This is for a short story competition which the limit is 1500 words, post compettion Ill definitely be expanding on this idea :) it was an awesome thing to start ...

Thanks :) Im gonna be revising it as the month goes on, hopefully get better ;)

Hiya, the limit for this piece is 1500 words so I havent got much leeway for backstory but ive tried my best, im gonna focus on reworking some parts to ...