Nephthys

Hello, I am back for part of my review! :) He yelps and lets go. ZIL takes ADINA's head in his arms and holds her steady so she cannot bite ...

PART 8 INT. SESSRUMNIR. DAY. GWENDOLYN sits on the floor of the main domed room. LOKI is there too. LOKI I'm sure you realize that you're in a very delicate ...

PART 7 INT. THE TREE TRUNK ROOM. NIGHT. GWENDOLYN sits on the huge bed, leaning against the headboard. IDUN is sprawled out along its length. IDUN ...and the thing with ...

PART 6 EXT. OUTSIDE THE GRAND HALL. NIGHT. The GODS disperse into the night. IDUN leads GWENDOLYN down a winding path. BRAGI- Idun's "charming" husband and the god of poetry- ...

PART 5 EXT. A FOREST. EARLY MORNING. Loki stops in a large, snowy clearing. There is an old wishing well in the middle and a pile of polished white stones ...

PART 4 INT. A FAMILY HOME. NIGHT. GWENDOLYN lets the front door swing closed behind her. She can hear LOKI's voice from the dining room. She tries to calm herself. ...

This is already 100x better! DAKOTA: Female, 17, long brown hair, blue eyes, wearing a bar uniform. OLD MAN: Male, mid 50’s, brown hair with hints of gray, wearing formal ...

PART 4 :) They reach the caves that AXEL and GRETEL were first seen in at the start. They stop and dismount. AXEL jumps off. BROWNLOW and ALEXIS get off. ...

PART 3! :) INT. THE STROM FAMILY HOME. DAY. GWENDOLYN comes through the front door and removes her outerwear. BESSIE trundles towards her and attacks her with a hug. BESSIE ...

PART 3 :) AXEL is storming storms out of the village in a angrily AXEL: Father has no right to disdain me from my friends, no right at all I ...

Part 3 :) They enter the hut, For shooting purposes, it is important to include every character in each shot. Instead of "they" put AXEL, NADIA and GRETEL. While this ...

Alright - Part 2! The night sky sits beautifully on top of a row of hills, dimly lit by the stars. I like this. AXEL and GRETEL exit from the ...

PART 2: INT. A FAMILY HOME. NIGHT. The kitchen of the most normal family in the world. Warm, friendly. GWENDOLYN removes a tray of potatoes from the oven, and arranges ...

PART 4 EXT. TANGIN MANOR GARDENS - DAY. THE DOCTOR, VANCE and EUDORA run into the gardens. Eudora and Vance are extremely out of breath. EUDORA (In between breaths) You're ...

Thanks very much for the helpful suggestions! A couple of the things that you mentioned should explain themselves away in future parts, but I can see that I have a ...