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Re: Imperceptible
hey, i liked the idea of the poem. it was made in a very different manner which i liked. 1.i think you overused your hyphens. 2. i would have liked ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: The dream is real
I looked out of the window of the airplane that I was sitting in. The sight that I saw really shocked me. The wing of the plane was on fire. ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: If I told you
wow! i really liked this poem. seriously, i did like it. i liked it bacause it had a really smooth flow, and the words you chose were simple yet efficient. ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: This Valentine
I haven’t seen you since june, I remember our fatal kiss under the moon, My love for you was too great, But now, it’s too late. I wish, I could ...
Feb 14, 2011 -
Re: The Love flu
The doctor says, i have an infection, that i'm taken over by affection, for you. I can't imagine my life without you, everyday i hope to meet you, i'm stung ...
Dec 18, 2010 -
Re: A Reflection
You blame other's for the mistakes you did, even though your own glass is covered by a lid. You think you are the best, but you are no better than ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Picking At My Nail Polish
this poem is good for a first try! you have talent in poetry so keep writing!
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Peeling Away the Wallpaper
i liked the poem 1. you lost way a bit by talking about churches 2.i liked the flowery alliteration 3.you used some great words 4. it was very creative 5. ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: The pain I give myself
This poem was actually inspired by my bird's death, this morning You can throw me in a dirty pot; make me into a boiling stew; But the pain I give ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: What we are
ok, I know the rhyme scheme is messed up but I like it this way. It gives it a twist. I think this is about becoming a teenager, but truly, ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: kiss, hug, cry
Would you kiss me if I said I loved you? Would you hug if I said I cared? if I said I hate you would you shed a tear?( the ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Tempting Fate
I lie here in this dreaming state. Too often had I tempted fate.( nice rhyming words) He came for me, dripping blood. A pointed finger, I understood.(i really loved these ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: These Scars
Love is a malicious gift,(a great usage of words) Delicious torment,(cliche, but still good) A toxic kiss.(great) Love, from whence this poision drips,( good line) Destroys my will, My will ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Rain
Rain has many voices, Those we cannot hear, Though when we truly listen, Whispers whislte with the wind.(the spelling is whistle) Though many cannot understand, Some have the heart to ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Dear god, I killed my husband
Dear God, I hate my life, I'm forced to live with a man, who will not admit I'm his wife.(i think making will not to won't will improve the flow ...
Oct 14, 2010
